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"Come on kids, You must not play or touch the things that aren't yours, You ought to ask for permission from the owner..." Re...
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Maria had always lived with her parents. She dreamed to go out home and when she was 18 years old, she said goodbye and she rent a house. ...
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The idea is great, but I think you haven´t developed it as a story. It sounds like a reflection you have made about the topic you have established. If have also found some grammar mistakes. =)
ResponderEliminarI like it, it's a reflection interesting. if you wanted to improve it, you could put another sentence for emphasize.
ResponderEliminarBut it's nice!
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